Here’s a beaded cat-ear headband for $1,290 at net-a-porter, but that’s not the problem.
Here’s the description:
There are so many things wrong in this one paragraph! I counted six word crimes, and you may find that I passed some over in a fleeting moment of generosity.
My favorite is “a set of bold red lips.” Who has a “set” of lips? Not me. Would a “pair” of lips be better, or is it wiser to just assume that everyone has two lips, as opposed to a single lip or a trio of lips? If these are the notes of an editor, god help us.
Would anyone like to try making the editor’s notes even worse? (hint: I noticed they omitted the word “sans,” which is usually a hallmark of this kind of crap.)
Did anyone find more than six grating word crimes? Show your work.